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18 Jan 2017 21:24 | Author: User1488435210 | Category: Essay domestic animal dog

Bad Example #1
To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

Highschool bored me, simply it was not challenging, highschool is no longer an institution which can provide an education sufficient to meet the challages of the modern economic situation. A highschool diploma is no longer a document which alone will allow an indivual to attain a job which will support a family. Also, the SAT is no longer a test which divides those who have studied and have made the effort to achieve, from those who bumble through school. At the point books were published on how to pass the SAT, it simply became another test which doesn’t prove anything definitely. Because of my viewpoint on highschool and the SAT I did not exert myself on either. I was reserving myself for college. College is the difference which makes the difference. Of two people applying for the same job, similar in everyway except for the fact that one is the holder of a college degree and the other is not, the degree holder is far more likely to get the job. Further, college is where I will learn the knowledge and skills I will use in the workforce of my generation.

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    organicelephant977 18 Jan 2017 06:24

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    bluebutterfly517 18 Jan 2017 02:48

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

    The overall application package will represent who "you" are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often be a very important way for committee members to get to know why you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential to take great care in preparing this part of your application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions that are partly based on what you say in this essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.

    After you have written the first, second, or third draft, there are another set of evaluative questions that you can work through to help you revise your essay.

    In college admissions essays, wordiness is by far the most common stylistic error. In most cases, students could cut one-third of an essay, lose no meaningful content, and make the piece much more engaging and effective.

    Wordiness comes in many forms with many different names -- deadwood, repetition, redundancy, BS, filler, fluff -- but whatever the type, those extraneous words have no place in a winning college admissions essay.

    Looking for college essay help? Subscribe to Shmoop''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''s 12-month student plan , and you''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''ll get one FREE round of feedback on your college essay.*

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    One of the most vital parts of any college application is the essay portion, or personal statement.  Naturally, you want to do as well as possible so you begin to research college application essay examples to either give you a good starting point, or to see how yours measures up to someone else’s.  And in reality, that’s perfectly fine.  The intention of this college preparation  article is to give you a concrete example of what your college application essay or personal statement should look like.

    Writing a dull, uninteresting or worse yet, inappropriate college essay can get you denied!  Yes, you read that right.  But then the question sets in: “What in the world should I write about?”.  It’s a good question, so let’s take a look at 3 main things you want to cover when beginning, as an outline.  After each point, we’ll give a look at what most college application essay examples look like!  But please, don’t copy this format word for word!  Do your own work, make it about YOU and make it unique to your experiences and background.

    Structure: Personal Narrative
    Topic: Internet Start-Up
    Thesis: I led a multi-million dollar design team; I can succeed in law school.
    Elements of Style: Comparison to David & Goliath
    Committee Appeal: Tangible Impact, Real World Experience, Pro-Active Starter, Good Leader
    Success Rating: A/9

    The second-to-last paragraph packs in the most value to the admissions committee for the space used, but the background story is important for this paragraph to be so powerful. To make the background story do more work for him, the writer could plant more indicators of his positive qualities and characteristics in the early part of the essay. For example, he could mention how he used his oral communication skills to communicate with his design team and supervisors, so that the admissions committee knows he feels that mastery of oral communication skills is important.

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    purpleleopard628 18 Jan 2017 03:30

    Personal Statement The Personal Statement is part of Michigan State s undergraduate application for admission. As part of the application, each applicant is required to submit a short essay of up to 400 words on one of the topics below. This statement may be considered as a positive factor to enhance admissibility, as well as for scholarship consideration. The Personal Statement topics on the 2010 application are: * Describe the environment you come from - for example, your family, community, or school - and how this environment has affected or influenced your plans for the future. * Briefly discuss an activity or organization that you are participating in outside of your own cultural group. * Describe your experiences promoting global understanding and/or the value of diversity in society.

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    silverpeacock914 17 Jan 2017 22:26

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

    The overall application package will represent who "you" are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often be a very important way for committee members to get to know why you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential to take great care in preparing this part of your application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions that are partly based on what you say in this essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.

    After you have written the first, second, or third draft, there are another set of evaluative questions that you can work through to help you revise your essay.

    In college admissions essays, wordiness is by far the most common stylistic error. In most cases, students could cut one-third of an essay, lose no meaningful content, and make the piece much more engaging and effective.

    Wordiness comes in many forms with many different names -- deadwood, repetition, redundancy, BS, filler, fluff -- but whatever the type, those extraneous words have no place in a winning college admissions essay.

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    greentiger575 17 Jan 2017 23:28

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

    The overall application package will represent who "you" are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often be a very important way for committee members to get to know why you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential to take great care in preparing this part of your application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions that are partly based on what you say in this essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.

    After you have written the first, second, or third draft, there are another set of evaluative questions that you can work through to help you revise your essay.

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    User1488068759 18 Jan 2017 08:46

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

    The overall application package will represent who "you" are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often be a very important way for committee members to get to know why you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential to take great care in preparing this part of your application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions that are partly based on what you say in this essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.

    After you have written the first, second, or third draft, there are another set of evaluative questions that you can work through to help you revise your essay.

    In college admissions essays, wordiness is by far the most common stylistic error. In most cases, students could cut one-third of an essay, lose no meaningful content, and make the piece much more engaging and effective.

    Wordiness comes in many forms with many different names -- deadwood, repetition, redundancy, BS, filler, fluff -- but whatever the type, those extraneous words have no place in a winning college admissions essay.

    Looking for college essay help? Subscribe to Shmoop''s 12-month student plan , and you''ll get one FREE round of feedback on your college essay.*

    *Once you''ve subscribed, you''ll email your essay to [email protected], and the experts at Shmoop will help you take your essay to the next level.

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    smallostrich752 18 Jan 2017 03:52

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

    The overall application package will represent who "you" are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often be a very important way for committee members to get to know why you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential to take great care in preparing this part of your application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions that are partly based on what you say in this essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.

    After you have written the first, second, or third draft, there are another set of evaluative questions that you can work through to help you revise your essay.

    In college admissions essays, wordiness is by far the most common stylistic error. In most cases, students could cut one-third of an essay, lose no meaningful content, and make the piece much more engaging and effective.

    Wordiness comes in many forms with many different names -- deadwood, repetition, redundancy, BS, filler, fluff -- but whatever the type, those extraneous words have no place in a winning college admissions essay.

    Looking for college essay help? Subscribe to Shmoop's 12-month student plan , and you'll get one FREE round of feedback on your college essay.*

    *Once you've subscribed, you'll email your essay to [email protected], and the experts at Shmoop will help you take your essay to the next level.

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    User1487924818 18 Jan 2017 03:45

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

    The overall application package will represent who "you" are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often be a very important way for committee members to get to know why you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential to take great care in preparing this part of your application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions that are partly based on what you say in this essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.

    After you have written the first, second, or third draft, there are another set of evaluative questions that you can work through to help you revise your essay.

    In college admissions essays, wordiness is by far the most common stylistic error. In most cases, students could cut one-third of an essay, lose no meaningful content, and make the piece much more engaging and effective.

    Wordiness comes in many forms with many different names -- deadwood, repetition, redundancy, BS, filler, fluff -- but whatever the type, those extraneous words have no place in a winning college admissions essay.

    Looking for college essay help? Subscribe to Shmoop''''''''''''''''s 12-month student plan , and you''''''''''''''''ll get one FREE round of feedback on your college essay.*

    *Once you''''''''''''''''ve subscribed, you''''''''''''''''ll email your essay to [email protected], and the experts at Shmoop will help you take your essay to the next level.

    One of the most vital parts of any college application is the essay portion, or personal statement.  Naturally, you want to do as well as possible so you begin to research college application essay examples to either give you a good starting point, or to see how yours measures up to someone else’s.  And in reality, that’s perfectly fine.  The intention of this college preparation  article is to give you a concrete example of what your college application essay or personal statement should look like.

    Writing a dull, uninteresting or worse yet, inappropriate college essay can get you denied!  Yes, you read that right.  But then the question sets in: “What in the world should I write about?”.  It’s a good question, so let’s take a look at 3 main things you want to cover when beginning, as an outline.  After each point, we’ll give a look at what most college application essay examples look like!  But please, don’t copy this format word for word!  Do your own work, make it about YOU and make it unique to your experiences and background.

    Structure: Personal Narrative
    Topic: Internet Start-Up
    Thesis: I led a multi-million dollar design team; I can succeed in law school.
    Elements of Style: Comparison to David & Goliath
    Committee Appeal: Tangible Impact, Real World Experience, Pro-Active Starter, Good Leader
    Success Rating: A/9

    The second-to-last paragraph packs in the most value to the admissions committee for the space used, but the background story is important for this paragraph to be so powerful. To make the background story do more work for him, the writer could plant more indicators of his positive qualities and characteristics in the early part of the essay. For example, he could mention how he used his oral communication skills to communicate with his design team and supervisors, so that the admissions committee knows he feels that mastery of oral communication skills is important.

  9. author
    bigtiger841 18 Jan 2017 08:02

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

  10. author
    User1488371732 18 Jan 2017 02:11

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

    The overall application package will represent who "you" are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often be a very important way for committee members to get to know why you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential to take great care in preparing this part of your application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions that are partly based on what you say in this essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.

    After you have written the first, second, or third draft, there are another set of evaluative questions that you can work through to help you revise your essay.

    In college admissions essays, wordiness is by far the most common stylistic error. In most cases, students could cut one-third of an essay, lose no meaningful content, and make the piece much more engaging and effective.

    Wordiness comes in many forms with many different names -- deadwood, repetition, redundancy, BS, filler, fluff -- but whatever the type, those extraneous words have no place in a winning college admissions essay.

    Looking for college essay help? Subscribe to Shmoop''''''''s 12-month student plan , and you''''''''ll get one FREE round of feedback on your college essay.*

    *Once you''''''''ve subscribed, you''''''''ll email your essay to [email protected], and the experts at Shmoop will help you take your essay to the next level.

    One of the most vital parts of any college application is the essay portion, or personal statement.  Naturally, you want to do as well as possible so you begin to research college application essay examples to either give you a good starting point, or to see how yours measures up to someone else’s.  And in reality, that’s perfectly fine.  The intention of this college preparation  article is to give you a concrete example of what your college application essay or personal statement should look like.

    Writing a dull, uninteresting or worse yet, inappropriate college essay can get you denied!  Yes, you read that right.  But then the question sets in: “What in the world should I write about?”.  It’s a good question, so let’s take a look at 3 main things you want to cover when beginning, as an outline.  After each point, we’ll give a look at what most college application essay examples look like!  But please, don’t copy this format word for word!  Do your own work, make it about YOU and make it unique to your experiences and background.

  11. author
    purpletiger553 18 Jan 2017 06:02

    The following are examples of personal statements that were sent to Illinois State University as part of the application process.

    Bad Example #1
    To Whom It May Concern: I am interested in Illinois State University. I was glad to read that you like me know that student motivation and academic preparation are not fully revealed by a student’s high school transcript or by standardized tests.

    Important Note for 2016-17 Applicants: The Common Application changed on August 1st, 2013! The tips and sample essays below will still provide useful guidance and essay samples for the new Common Application, but be sure also to read the new article for the 2016-17 Common Application:  Tips for the 5 New Common Application Essay Prompts.

    The first step to writing a stellar personal essay on your college application is to understand your options. Below is a discussion of the six essay options from the Common Application. Also be sure to check out these 5 Application Essay Tips.

    The overall application package will represent who "you" are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often be a very important way for committee members to get to know why you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential to take great care in preparing this part of your application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions that are partly based on what you say in this essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.

    After you have written the first, second, or third draft, there are another set of evaluative questions that you can work through to help you revise your essay.

    In college admissions essays, wordiness is by far the most common stylistic error. In most cases, students could cut one-third of an essay, lose no meaningful content, and make the piece much more engaging and effective.

    Wordiness comes in many forms with many different names -- deadwood, repetition, redundancy, BS, filler, fluff -- but whatever the type, those extraneous words have no place in a winning college admissions essay.

    Looking for college essay help? Subscribe to Shmoop''''s 12-month student plan , and you''''ll get one FREE round of feedback on your college essay.*

    *Once you''''ve subscribed, you''''ll email your essay to [email protected], and the experts at Shmoop will help you take your essay to the next level.

    One of the most vital parts of any college application is the essay portion, or personal statement.  Naturally, you want to do as well as possible so you begin to research college application essay examples to either give you a good starting point, or to see how yours measures up to someone else’s.  And in reality, that’s perfectly fine.  The intention of this college preparation  article is to give you a concrete example of what your college application essay or personal statement should look like.

    Writing a dull, uninteresting or worse yet, inappropriate college essay can get you denied!  Yes, you read that right.  But then the question sets in: “What in the world should I write about?”.  It’s a good question, so let’s take a look at 3 main things you want to cover when beginning, as an outline.  After each point, we’ll give a look at what most college application essay examples look like!  But please, don’t copy this format word for word!  Do your own work, make it about YOU and make it unique to your experiences and background.