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18 Jan 2017 21:24 | Author: whitegoose308 | Category: Bodycare business plan

HULLO, and welcome to the long-awaited, much-anticipated finale to our Harry Potter quiz series! You should know that I expected exactly 0% of you to make it this.

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    purplegorilla881 18 Jan 2017 03:41

    Write about what you do in your community or school now. Write what you would like to do to help in the community. Write about what you want from the society, like meet new people, learn more, and develop leadership skills. Describe some of the skills that you have now. When write any essay, I normally do the intro last.

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     🌚死Заnax sмерtи死 🌚 17 Jan 2017 22:32

    "I feel that each student with the privledge to such commitment should not only devote their time and education to this foundation, but their heart as well." Avoid "I feel"; "privilege" is misspelled; how can education be devoted to NJHS? Perhaps: Students so privileged should pour their hearts into such a commitment by behaving honorably and generously towards others. "I’m truly honored, as a student from Canyon Breeze elementary to be chosen by my teachers and other leaders from the school to give me the chance to prove myself as a determined hard working youth citizen." You use flowery language. You can simplify. Perhaps: I appreciate the opportunity to be a part of this organization. "As Albert Einstein once quoted - “Only one who devotes himself to a cause with his whole strength and soul can be a true master. For this reason mastery demands all of a person.” This quote is so touching and completely true." Albert Einstein said that, he didn t quote it. Perhaps: Albert Einstein once said, ".", and I agree with him. "For I believe I am a student who has in demand ability to ace this incredible opportunity by devoting all my commitment and making my community proud. " My abilities as a student will allow me to devote my all to this organization and give back to my community. "Whether it be smiling at a child who’s soul is in desperate starvation of attention and needs only a touch of inspiration to lift themselves, or giving a helping hand to someone whom currently is in dismay." While this sentence is long, it s still a fragment. Perhaps: I take every opportunity to help those around me, whether it be smiling at an upset child or helping out a friend struggling in math class. "I don’t believe you must go to a near by humane recreation center to help an individual. Because absolutely every place in the world has someone who is in impoverishment." Human instead of humane. Perhaps: It isn t necessary to travel to a third world country to make a difference. Our own community has people in need, and it is my desire to help them. "Someone who is in need for words of wisdom." This is a fragment. "And that is exactly what I’m striving for everyday to attain. To help one or more souls who are looking for a little boost of encouragement." I am looking to encourage those with lost souls and bring joy into their lives, even in small ways. "On the street’s or at school, there is always somebody who’s longing for support." The apostrophe is used incorrectly. "I have the compassion, generosity, and hospitality that is essential to fulfill this crucial concept." Concept? Your word choices are a bit off. Perhaps:.hospitality that is needed to make a difference. "A major, if not the most important criteria for NJHS is knowledge." An important characteristic of a NJHS member is knowledge. "My greatest dreams and ambitions is to be and to become successful." It is my dream to become successful. "I have dreams, and a future ahead of me which I am eager to accomplish. My education means a lot to me, and I’m ambitious to attend school and achieve outstanding grades that I know for a fact my parents will be delighted to see." You can t accomplish a future, or be ambitious to attend school. Don t mention your parents. Perhaps: I know I can accomplish important things in life and I am eager to see how my future unfolds. I value my education and I work hard to earn outstanding grades. "I’m willing to show more then just a simple essay. Please ponder on all that I have informed you with." Never address the reader directly in an essay by using "you." You can t "renovate" a person. "Standards of acquirement" doesn t make any sense; you re referring to their requirements, which is different. "Your" instead of "you re." The last sentence is unnecessary. I would delete this part of the essay and write more about how your ambitions make you a good candidate for NJHS. Don t end the essay with "With Love & Care. - Alyssa Lundberg". You re writing an essay, not a letter. In general, you use incorrect details and way too many details. I hope this helped! I m way older than you, so don t feel bad about your writing abilities. I hope you get into NJHS. (:

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    Эдуард Р.Ушак 18 Jan 2017 07:03

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    PETROV MISHANYA 18 Jan 2017 01:44

    National Junior Honor Society Essays. Only available on StudyMode. National Junior Honor Society Essay. National Junior Honor Society I want to be.